Trong chuyên mục bài mẫu IELTS (IELTS model essay band 8.0) tuần này, thầy Andy đã chọn ra một đề bài rất được các bạn quan tâm từ cuốn sách Cambridge IELTS Book 5, với topic competition in children sau đó viết phần essay mẫu để các bạn cùng tham khảo.
Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
In the modern age, there are many different ideas and methods about how children should be raised and educated. There are those who believe that a competitive spirit is essential to develop a young person’s mind and body. However, others contend that a more cooperative approach is best.
On the one hand, those who favor a competition-based approach to bringing up children would argue that it brings out the best in youngsters. Children who compete must push beyond their own limits and improve themselves. For example, a competitive sports day in primary school can help them to try their best and be proud of their achievements.
Additionally, a competitive structure can teach children the concepts of fair play, dignity and self-discipline which are critical skills needed in adult life. Finally, it cannot be denied that a competitive academic system enables children to understand their own strengths and weaknesses. It helps them to prepare for the world of real work where they will have to compete with others on a daily basis. In other words, a competitive spirit as a child produces a stronger and more capable adult.
Conversely, there are others who believe that a more cooperative environment nurtures and develops children more effectively. They would argue that cooperating teaches children the importance of team work, good communication and empathy. For instance, a student who works as part of a team in school may also find it is easy to work or even lead teams at work as an adult. Moreover, a cooperative basis for raising a child may be more emotionally beneficial and result in confident, balanced young people who know they have the support of others. In highly competitive environments the mental and physical health of children can often be affected.
To sum up, although there a clearly merits for both arguments, I believe that a competitive system is best for children because it gives them the best possible chance of preparation for life in the real world once they have left school. It also produces a more independent and self-disciplined adult in the vast majority of cases.
Giảng viên Andy Robertson