Bài mẫu IELTS Writing Task 2: Giải đề thi thật 28/12/2024 Topic Robot

Đề bài

Some people think that robots are very important to human’s future development, while others think that they are dangerous and have negative effects on society. 

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Bài mẫu Band 8.0

The rise of robotics and artificial intelligence has sparked considerable debate about its implications for humanity. While some caution that robots pose significant risks to society, I firmly believe that, despite their potential dangers, robots are indispensable to human progress.

On the one hand, critics emphasize the hazards robots could bring to society. One major concern is the displacement of workers, as machines increasingly take over tasks traditionally performed by humans. Mass unemployment can lead to economic inequality, social unrest, and even a loss of purpose for those affected. Moreover, robots lack emotional intelligence and moral judgment, raising fears about ethical dilemmas in sectors like healthcare and law enforcement. For instance, autonomous systems making life-and-death decisions could result in devastating consequences, further justifying the skepticism surrounding their widespread adoption. Thus, the risks associated with unchecked robotic advancements cannot be overlooked.

On the other hand, proponents argue that robots are pivotal to addressing pressing global challenges. Automation and advanced robotic technologies have revolutionized industries, improving efficiency and reducing costs. For example, robots in manufacturing have significantly increased production rates, boosting economic growth. Additionally, robots play a crucial role in areas humans cannot safely access, such as space exploration and disaster response. In such cases, their contributions are unparalleled and invaluable. Ultimately, these advancements not only enhance quality of life but also pave the way for future innovations, making them essential for progress.

In conclusion, robots embody both opportunities and challenges. While their potential to disrupt society is undeniable, the benefits they offer far outweigh the drawbacks. Therefore, embracing robotics responsibly is key to ensuring their role in fostering a better future for humanity.

(286 words)

Teacher Tony G- Cựu giám khảo IELTS, giảng viên tại trung tâm KTDC IELTS

Breakdown of the Band Score

Task Response (TR): Band 8

Explanation:

• The essay fully addresses all parts of the task by discussing both views and presenting a clear opinion.
• Main ideas (risks of robots and their indispensability) are well-developed with relevant examples and explanations.
• The essay takes a nuanced approach, acknowledging the potential dangers of robots while emphasizing their necessity, which aligns with higher band requirements.

To achieve Band 9, the essay could delve deeper into specific examples or counterarguments to balance the discussion more thoroughly.

Coherence and Cohesion (CC): Band 8

Explanation:

• The essay has a clear and logical structure with an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
• Cohesive devices (while, moreover, for instance, thus, on the other hand) are used effectively and naturally without overuse.
• Linking within and between sentences is smooth, and the progression of ideas is easy to follow.

To reach Band 9, the cohesion could be even more seamless, where transitions and connections are so natural that they do not draw attention.

Lexical Resource (LR): Band 8

Explanation:

• A wide range of topic-specific and formal vocabulary is used accurately and effectively, including terms like robotics, hazards, mass unemployment, ethical dilemmas, and automation.
• Collocations such as economic inequality, social unrest, and space exploration demonstrate a high level of lexical control.
• There are no noticeable errors in word choice or form.

To achieve Band 9, the essay could demonstrate even more variety in less common idiomatic phrases and precise paraphrasing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy (GRA): Band 9

Explanation:

•  The essay uses a wide range of complex grammatical structures accurately, including subordinate clauses (while their potential to disrupt society is undeniable), conditional structures (if unchecked), and participial phrases (raising fears about ethical dilemmas).
• There are no grammatical errors, and punctuation is used flawlessly.
• Sentence structures are varied and sophisticated, reflecting Band 9 competency.

Cohesive Devices Breakdown

1. While: Introduces contrast effectively.
2. I firmly believe that: Signposts the writer’s opinion/position.
3. One major concern is: Introduces a specific argument.
4. Moreover: Adds supporting ideas, enhancing flow.
5. For instance: Provides an example to clarify the point.
6. Thus: Concludes the argument within a paragraph.
7. On the other hand: Signals the shift to a contrasting perspective.
8. For example: Introduces another example.
9. In such cases: Highlights specific scenarios.
10. Ultimately: Concludes an argument persuasively.

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