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The diagram below illustrates the process of producing drinking water using a solar-powered water pump and water filter. Provide an overview of the information by identifying and describing the key details, and include comparisons where appropriate.
1. Analyzing the Visual Data (5 minutes)
2. Planning the Response (3 minutes)
3. Writing the Response (10 minutes)
4. Reviewing and Editing (2 minutes)
The diagram outlines the method of generating potable water using a solar-powered water pump and water filter. The process involves several integrated stages, beginning with sunlight utilization and culminating in clean water distribution, with a notable emphasis on solar energy as the primary power source while filtration ensures the water’s purity.
The process starts with sunlight striking a solar panel, which converts it into electricity via a converter. This energy powers a pump, which extracts water from an underground well and transfers it to a water tank. The use of renewable solar power significantly reduces reliance on conventional energy, whereas the initial water remains unfiltered at this stage, highlighting a preliminary step before purification.
In the subsequent phase, water from the tank flows through a water filter, which purifies it into drinking water with high efficiency. The clean water is ultimately collected in a movable container and dispensed via a tap, whereas any unfiltered residue is separated during filtration. This concludes the process of producing potable water using solar power.
(170 words- by teacher Tony G, former IELTS examiner)
1. Which extracts water from an underground well: Relative clause adds detail
E.g, “The machine, which processes data, is advanced.”
2. Which purifies it into drinking water: Relative clause with object.
E.g. “The device, which cleans the air, is effective.”
3. While filtration ensures the water’s purity: Adverbial clause shows simultaneous action.
E.g. “While it rained, we worked indoors.”
4. Outlines: Provides a summary (Tóm tắt, phác thảo)
E.g. “The report outlines the findings clearly.”
5. Integrated: Combined components (Tích hợp, kết hợp)
E.g. “Integrated systems enhance performance.”
6. Culminating: Reaching a conclusion (Đạt đến đỉnh điểm, kết thúc bằng)
E.g. “The project culminated in success.”
7. Notable: Worthy of notice (Đáng chú ý, nổi bật)
E.g. “Notable improvements were made.”
8. Significantly: Importantly (Đáng kể, quan trọng)
E.g. “Significantly, costs were reduced.”
1. Task Achievement (TA): Fully addresses the task with a comprehensive overview, detailed stage descriptions, and effective comparisons (e.g., solar vs. conventional power, filtered vs. unfiltered water).
2. Lexical Resource (LR): Employs advanced vocabulary (outlines, integrated) and precise terms, enhancing the academic tone with appropriate collocations.
3. Grammatical Range and Accuracy (GRA): Uses complex structures (which, while) accurately, with varied sentence lengths and no errors.
4. Coherence and Cohesion (CC): Maintains a logical flow with strong linking (e.g., “in the subsequent phase,” “whereas”), ensuring a cohesive response.
The diagram demonstrates the way drinking water is created using a solar pump and filter system.
The process includes several stages, beginning with sunlight and concluding with the availability of clean water. It relies on solar energy and involves filtering to ensure the water is safe for use.
The process starts when sunlight strikes a solar panel, which generates electricity through a converter. This electricity operates a pump that draws water from an underground well and moves it into a water tank. At this stage, the water remains untreated. Next, the water is directed through a filter, transforming it into drinking water. The purified water is then stored in a movable container and dispensed through a tap. During filtration, some impurities are separated and discarded. The sequence highlights the use of solar power to lift water and the importance of filtering to remove contaminants, showing a straightforward progression from raw water to a usable product.
(155 words)
1. Task Achievement (TA): Offers a general description of the process with key stages identified, but lacks detailed comparisons (e.g., efficiency of solar vs. other methods) and depth, aligning with Band 6 standards.
2. Lexical Resource (LR): Employs basic vocabulary (e.g., “created,” “moves”) with some repetition, lacking the range or precision for higher scores.
3. Grammatical Range and Accuracy (GRA): Uses simple sentence structures with minor errors (e.g., “remains untreated” could be expanded), showing limited complexity but adequate accuracy.
4. Coherence and Cohesion (CC): Follows a logical order with basic linking (e.g., “next,” “then”), though transitions are simple, reflecting a Band 6 level of organization.
| Criterion | Band 8+ Report | Band 6.0 Report |
|---|---|---|
| Task Achievement (TA) | Offers a detailed overview and compares solar power vs. conventional energy. | Covers main steps but lacks detailed contrasts. |
| Lexical Resource (LR) | Uses outlines and integrated for sophistication. | Relies on basic terms like “created” and “moves.” |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy (GRA) | Features which and while for complexity. | Uses simple sentences with little variation. |
| Coherence and Cohesion (CC) | Flows with in the subsequent phase and whereas. | Links with “next” but lacks smooth progression. |
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